The reason I ask this is, I’m trying to put together my query for ’THE SAINTS OF BELVEDERE ROAD’ (no, I’m not sending anything out, it’s just nagging at me), and I had one person suggest ’gambling’ instead of ’bargaining’. Here’s what he wrote.
‘On the eve of her eldest son's birthday, Amelia learns that her husband isn't cheating, he's gambling. He's gambling with her family's souls.'
To me, the word ‘gamble’ implies a risk - he may get what he wants, or he may not. While ‘bargaining‘ (to me) denotes trade. He gets what he wants for something they want.
I’m at odds with this word, but others in the group seem to like it.
This seems to be a trend - ‘I’m a new writer and my story is gonna make me gazillions! So what the fuck do you know.
Lets just see where you are in a year, asshole.
And having a shit-load of distractions isn’t helping me either. Between this furnace thing, getting my ankle looked at again, and having to have a third set of x-rays done, I just can’t focus. Not to mention I am five days behind and won‘t be able to write tomorrow afternoon or Friday.
I need to put this story away for a while, don’t I. Forcing myself to write won’t do me or it any good. I have two chapters left in VISIONS, maybe, after this week, I’ll work on it. For now, I’ll keep plugging away at this, but I’m not going to complete the competition this year.
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So, here is a short synopsis of what’s happened in the second quarter;
During the meeting, Louise notices a woman in the background watching her. Later, she gets a strange set of text messages and learns it’s from the same person. This person believes that something odd is going on, and is frustrated that no one seems to be taking this seriously. She asks Louise for help, and Louise agrees.
Getting questions answered takes her to the home of the spinster Council elder Lenora Wilson. At first she’s nice to Louise, but when the younger woman starts asking really hard questions, her true feelings come out.
There is no time to argue, as a new apparition suddenly appears, a massive hole within the fabric of reality itself, and in an accident, Lenora is killed.
Later that night, after a cryptic talk with her twin daughters, Louise is visited by Lenora, who apologises and give Louise directions to a group of people who can help her learn what’s going on.
And this is where I’ve stopped. Saturday and today (Sunday) are a complete write off due to Sithboy’s sleep-over, and Monday is a school holiday, so I’ll be lucky to get a full day’s worth of writing in. That will make me behind by THREE DAYS!
As of today, I am officially two days behind on my NaNo schedule. Things were going fine, but then I ran into plot problems, namely, I’d only outlined up to chapter six and didn’t have any kind of an ending for my story. I finished chapter three yesterday, and now I’m getting into the meat of the story and had to figure out, not only what happens past this point, but how I was going to resolve it. After all, how does one tear apart or repair an invisible barrier? I also had to have a valid reason for it, so I turned to my dirty dishes and low and behold, it came to me (as well as a lot of other things), and lets just say, one certain angel, who has been demonized for the last two millennia, will return home to a somewhat happy welcome.
Two other reasons I got so behind; editorial and essay. My fifth editorial comes due on the 17th, and I’m still short about a hundred words. I’m hoping to pull off the ’fun’ theme, like I did with my first one. Key word being ’hoping’.
And I’m entering an essay contest sponsored by Editor Unleashed and Smashwords called ’Why I Write‘. I have it finished, just have to make sure it sounds right and thing are spelt correctly. It’s based on the first time I ever thought about writing and what influenced me. I’ve always felt weird because I read about all these authors who knew, almost since birth, that they wanted to write as a career. I’ve never wanted to make this a ’career’ per se, but I’ve known since I was teenager, that I wanted to tell good stories.
Anyway, if any of you do review it, I promise to return the favour, but it may not be until next month as I'm in the middle of NaNo.
Thanks all. :)
I know I should be doing this tomorrow, but I don't think I'll have time.
So, the first week of NaNo has passed, and so far, I’m doing really, really good. The site says that a daily goal of 1,667 will allow you to finish on time, but I’ve stretched that to an even 1,800, giving me a few hundred words more per day. I finished three days early last year, and I would like to try and beat that. If it’s possible.
So, here is a short synopsis of what’s happened so far;
The day after a battle re-enactment, Louise and her husband notice a strange occurrence dealing with the birds. Knowing that all life is connected, she sends off an email to another member of her order, hoping they might have some answers.
Strange sensations then overtake her, and she is drawn to a gully next to a corn field where she finds the ghost of a sixteen-year-old boy. She leads him through The Veil; the ethereal barrier that separates the spirit world from our world. Once her task is complete, she returns to this world and promptly passes out from exhaustion.
The next day, she witnesses a car crash and watches as a soul is sucked into a Hell vortex. Just when she things everything is fine, the vortex opens again and takes an innocent soul.
Several days later a meeting is called by a secret society of generational Guardians called the Order. They try to have meeting about the innocent being taken, but so many differences of opinions gets nothing resolved.
That’s it so far. I’m on the third chapter, with a word count as of Saturday November 7 of 12,614
Plus, I still have an editorial due on the 21st of this month. I’m seriously thinking of not doing it again next year.
Sorry I haven’t posted in a while, but after realizing that I wasn’t going to finish ‘VISIONS’ by the end of October, I stopped working on it and started gearing myself for NaNo. Which meant a complete ban on writing until the competition started. Period.
So far, things are going good, I’m keeping to my schedule of 1,800 per day and it’s not as cumbersome as I thought it would be. It takes me a few hours, but then I have the rest of the day to do other things; like laundry and cook meals. :P I’m thinking of posting a weekly summery and would not object to person’s commenting on whether or not they find the story interesting.
I’ve also committed (or should be committed) to reading a novel and doing a review for Flash Me Magazine. How’s that going, you ask? Meh, I'd rather not talk about it, but I promised Jenn I would do it, and I will keep that promise. Even if I end up scratching my eyes out and get my kid to read it to me.(Don't mind me Jenn, I'm just whining)
So, how are things on your end?
I'm getting sithboy a shot as soon as possible.
Excerpt from 'SAINTS'
“May we come in?” Homer asked. Amelia noted the days growth on his face, and could see the family resemblance between him and his daughter; the slightly faded blond curls that hinted of blond in his balding hairline, the way the bridge of their noses curved slightly. Even the way they held themselves was similar. Yet it was something about the hardness of his eyes that caused her to wonder just what they were doing here. “We really shouldn't be discussing this out on the porch.”
Writing this week felt more like a chore than something I enjoy. It started feeling like this as I neared the end of THE DRAGONSTONE too, maybe coming to the end of a project has something to do with it, but what ever it is, the fact writing becomes almost lonesome really bothers me.
I finished chapter 6 early on in the week, and have about 2k done of seven. So far everyone seems rather happy with the way things are progressing, for a change. Thursday I had to keep myself focussed as I revealed a certain plot to the MC. I started going off on a tangent, making the overall plot more complicated than it needed to be. At first, I thought it was a great idea, but as I thought more about it, why make the plot THAT complicated. Really. So I deleted about 150 words, most of it dialogue.
I’ve only got three weeks left to finish this novel before NaNo starts, which shouldn’t be that hard of a task as I only have about 2 ½ chapters left to write, but yesterday was a right off, and this weekend is Thanksgiving so that rules out any real word count for the next three days.
And speaking of Nano, I’ve only gotten about 6 chapters outlined for my novel this year. I’m hoping to be able to push this one to ten chapters, but like my current WIP, we shall see.
What a sucky way to start a long weekend.
Chapter six is finished, and from the looks of it, I'll be lucky to stretch this novel to ten chapters. Maybe in revisions I can do it, but as it stands now, this is a nine chapter novel. Which will bring it in just over 45k. But like I said, we'll see what happens come revision time.
One good thing, the characters involved likes the way things are working out. I got more of a motive from the killer yesterday. Betrayal is always a nasty business, especially when it comes from someone close to you, and I think I'll add one more dead body to the count, just to even the whole thing out and throw more suspicion on the unsuspecting character.
I hope my MC doesn't see this coming.
Yesterday I revised a portion of the fourth chapter of THE SAINTS OF BELVEDRE ROAD, and I'm so proud of what I wrote, I thought I'd share.
jljohnson.webs.com/saintsofbelvedereroad.h
If you read it, just remember it's still only in draft form. I still need to workshop it.
I've updated my webpge, and had to put in a new link for one of my shorts. Could a few of you click the link below, it'll take you to my webpage and then click on the link for Return To Eden, and let me know if it works.
jljohnson.webs.com/shortstories.htm
It goes straight there for me, but I don't know if that's because it's in the cache. Thanks. :)
Can someone please give me Sen. Bob Corker's email address so I can send him a list of what Canada has accomplished, and shared wtih the rest of the world.
www.google.com/hostednews/canadianpress/a
<I>Canada's history is, in fact, rich with medical breakthroughs, including the discovery of insulin, the first identification of stem cells and the invention of the first artificial kidney machine.</i>
I got this from the EDITOR UNLEASHED forum.
Spread the word. The integrity and originality of our words need to be upheld. NO ONE should get away with plagiarism. Thank you to Angel for doing the research and exposing this guy.
(The link should work now)
